Coconut said: Looks good, but still could have used more work. Tips:
Go a little easier on the contrast. Pure black on pure white makes unhappy eyes.
Clean the background a little better, especially outside the page border
Don't settle for crookedness. Rotate until it's perfect!
Thanks for the suggestions.
That said, Hiroyuki's work seems to be mostly in pure black and white -- I have a hard time finding greys (while zoomed in, and also while using his pixiv works as references) and he uses screen tones (note the geometric patterns) instead of gradient shading.
I may be wrong though.
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